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A Pony Tale Pt. 3

Dan woke up still in the hospital.  The nurses said himself as well as Derpy and Pinkie could leave this morning so that's what they planned to do.  As they went outside Spike approached them.

"Did you 3 hear the news?" Spike asked.

"No." relied Dan.

"5 more ponys were kidnapped." replied Spike.

"Who was kidnapped?" asked Dan.

"Rarity, Apple Jack, Rainbow Dash, Big Mac, and Twilight Sparkle." answered Spike.

"Don't worry, we'll save them, right ladies?" said Dan.

"Right." replied Derpy and Pinkie.

"Is there anything I can do to help?" asked Spike.

"Stay here.  When we get back I want to know everything that happened when we were gone." answered Dan.

"Got it." said Spike.

"You've never been without Twilight have you?" said Pinkie.

"Yeah, but I'm going to stay strong for her." answered Spike.

"What's our next move?" asked Derpy.

"We save Fluttershy." answered Dan.

"Where will we look?" asked Pinkie.

"Lets check her house, there may be a clue as to where her kidnapper took her." replied Dan.

"Oke doke, follow me." said Pinkie.

Pinkie led the group to Fluttershys house.  It was neatly cleaned on the outside.  As they went to the door they notice it was ajar.  Opening it they found the inside was a complete mess.  The place looked like a tornado went through, except that there was a thin layer of dust everywhere.  Pinkie sneezed from the dust sending confetti on the ground in front of her.

"Weird." thought Dan.

Suddenly a creek was heard from upstairs.

"Who's there?" demanded Dan.

There was no answer.  Suddenly a white bunny peeks out at the group.

"Angel." exclaimed Pinkie.

The bunny rushes down and hugs Pinkie.  Angel was a complete mess both emotionally and physically.  Her fur was sticking up everywhere and caked with mud.  Upon closer inspection Dan noticed a small amount of blood, he then notices and removes a blood red hair.

"Is this hair from this pony?" Dan asked as he showed angel a picture of the dark pony.

Angel shacked her head.  She then pulls her ears down in a similar manner as Fluttershys mane.

"It came from Fluttershy?" asked Pinkie.

Angel nodded.

"I thought Fluttershy had a pink mane." said Derpy.

"She does." answered Pinkie.

"Let's look for any sign of where she went." said Dan.

Angel pointed out a window.  Outside a pony could be seen in the distance.

"Let's go." said Dan.

They began to run toward the pony but Dan suddenly stopped.

"You 3 can stop following us now." said Dan.

The CMC emerge fro the bush they were hiding in.

"THE CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS, RESCUERS." the CMC shouted together.

"How about the Cutie Mark Crusaders, go home." said Dan.

"But, we just want to help." said Apple Bloom.

"I appreciate that but it's too dangerous." said Dan.

The CMC walked away with their heads down.

As they approached the pony, they realized something was wrong.

"You dyed your mane red Fluttershy." exclaimed Pinkie.

Sure enough Fluttershys mane was a blood red, as she turned around the face the group they noticed her eyes were blood red as well.

"So you finally found me." said Fluttershy.

"What's wrong with you, you seem different." said Pinkie.

"So you 3 survived the generals attack, don't think you'll get off so easy with me." said Fluttershy.

"She means to kill us, get ready." said Dan.

BATTLE

Dan HP: 250
Derpy HP: 220
Pinkie HP: 235
VS.
Fluttershy? HP: 500

Derpy threw a stale muffin at Fluttershy? (-40 HP 460 left)
Dan kicked Fluttershy? twice (-25 HP)(-25 HP 410 left)
Fluttershy? charges Dan (-50 HP 200 left)
Pinkie fires her party cannon at Fluttershy? (-45 HP 365 left)
Dan whispers something in Derpys ear.
Derpy: got it.
Derpy grabs Fluttershy? and throws her at Dan who kicks her back (-90 HP 275 left)
Fluttershy? becomes enraged.
Fluttershy? charges Pinkie (-65 HP 175 left)
Pinkie kicks Fluttershy (critical -80 HP 195 left)
Derpy throws a stale muffin at Fluttershy? (-40 HP 235 left)
Dan strikes Fluttershy? with his wing (-45 HP 190 left)
Fluttershy? flies by and strikes the whole team (all-50 HP Dan 150 left, Derpy 170 left, Pinkie 125 left)
Pinkie: Dan get in here.
Dan: got it.
Dan hops in Pinkies Party canon and is fires at Fluttershy? (-90 HP 100 left)
Derpy kicks Fluttershy? (-35 HP 65 left)
Dan is still dazed from being fired from Pinkies party canon.
Fluttershy? pounces on Dan (-60 HP 90 left)
Pinkie fires her party canon at Fluttershy? (-45 HP 20 left)
Derpy kicks Fluttershy (-35 HP KO)

Fluttershy stands still, for a moment is seems like she'll attack again.  Her mane slowly returns to her usual pink and the blood red glow disappears

from her eyes.

"I'm so sorry." said Fluttershy.

Before anyone can ask her why she attacked Fluttershy collapses on the ground.

"She just fainted." said Dan.

"What a failure." said a voice from above.

Rainbow Dash appears in front of the group.  Like Fluttershy was before Rainbow Dashes mane is a blood red instead of her usual rainbow colors, her eyes also had a blood red glow to them.

"It's a shame we can't infect those who have already been infected and cured."  said Rainbow Dash.

"What do you mean?" asked Dan.

Rainbow Dash ignores Dan.

"At least I can get this one." said Rainbow Dash.

Before anypony can react, Rainbow dash swooped by and grabbed Pinkie.

"Let me go." demanded Pinkie.

Rainbow Dash ignores Pinkies demand and flies away with her.

"HELP ME DAN." screams Pinkie.

"What do we do?" asked Derpy.

"There is nothing we can do Derpy." answered Dan.

"What about her?" asks Derpy.

"Lets carry her back to Ponyville." answered Dan.

"Won't she attack us again?" asked Derpy.

"I doubt it." answered Dan.

End of part 3
:iconuber-dan:
Part 3 of A Pony tale. Fluttershy is finally saved but now Pinkie Pie is kidnapped. How will Dan and Derpy save the ponys? Why is Rainbow Dash kidnapping ponys? And what did she meany by 'infected?' Find out in the next part.

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*Lizyos Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good suspense! I NEVER thought it would be Fluttershy xD
Great job! :la:
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:iconuber-dan:
Thanks, it gets better.
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:iconlizyos:
*Lizyos Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome
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*Hyperchaotix Oct 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Good, but there were 3 things that threw me off. ^^; I think you mean "Planned" and "without". Also, Spike never said Fluttershy was missing so that was a bit confusing when Dan said they were going to save her. Otherwise, this is good. :)
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:iconuber-dan:
I corrected the grammar mistakes, thanks. Twilight mentioned Fluttershy being kidnapped in part 1.
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*Hyperchaotix Oct 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Ah. Still seems a bit strange that Spike listed those ponies and Dan's first response is "Fluttershy". :/ But that might be just me.
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:iconuber-dan:
Dan knew Fluttershy was missing longer so she may have been in greater danger. I should have clarified that.
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:iconhyperchaotix:
*Hyperchaotix Oct 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Yeah... makes sense when you put it that way though. ^_^
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~sissysonikku Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is getting really good dan!
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:iconuber-dan:
Thanks and thanks for the fav.
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